Mockland Mocumentry

[Octavian]

Ok this is what I have so far in my head. This is a draft draft draft of a script since i'm pretty trying to get my ideas down before i forget them. If you figure each scene is 10 minutes i think total length of the film will be between 60-70 minutes with an opener and credits.

Here is what is written so far. I would love feedback and ideas for a challenge:

Mockland will almost have 2 stories running through it. The main is the fact that it will be shot like a nature documentary. Commentary constantly going on but if you listen carefully you can also hear of the feud developing between our characters and a rival team. There is the slapstick element of the our observer keeps getting caught and beat up in some manner.

Mockland Scenes Draft draft draft:

Practice one:
Opening scene, our observer see his first practice. This can be shot mostly freely of a real practice then commentary voiced over. He makes comment that this group tribe is known to some as The Gaul At the end of the scene our observer tries to go in for a closer look and gets yelled at to get that camera off the field about the time “he gets in the head” fades to black

Commentary will be about these ritualistic events occur on a weekly basis and how it appears the “size of the stick matters to some” etc etc

A meeting:

Observer is shooting through a window watching this meeting. The meeting starts of with typical people playing ps2 then moving on to discussion of what the groups goals are and how the group has to protect its reputation. That a something like the lost children seems need to be stopped, etc.

The commentary will be about how there are rumors that these groups have leaders and heroes. That only the elders have a right to vote and the other tribe members have to earn the right. Eventually our observer gets caught and some one throws him off the porch of the house they are at, camera goes black again.

War: a challenge occurs:

Dinner/Bar (Discussion of the challenge):


Practice 2 really far away (strategy and tactics of the challenge):
Is being shot and commented on really far away because our observer keeps getting caught and beat up so he thinks he will be safe far away on a hill. He ends up tripping and falling down the hill, camera goes black.


The final War to end all (resolution of the challenge between the Gaul and The Lost Children):

[hypo]

Mees Like it.

[Stroganoff]

wow ,you'd have to be a real ass to play the part of the observer.

[Octavian]

I'm almost thinking the observer needs a heavy intellectual britsh sounding accent (not queens english but that really proffesor sounding accent) or the australian crocodile accent. So it sounds/looks like a BBC like thing.

[hypo]

Maybe even Romanian! :D

[Berserker]

Blah!0

[Stroganoff]

you know, I could fake a great accent

[Octavian]

So whats a good challenge between the two groups? What are some good examples that has happened to Galatia in the past?

[MorGrendel]

I won't know... I'm one of like the only Galatians, never to quit :)